Snow vs Desert 6
Write a persuasive paragraph explaining whether you would prefer to live in a house surrounded by snow or a house surrounded by a desert. Consider factors such as climate, lifestyle, and personal preferences. Use persuasive language to convince your reader of your choice, and ensure your paragraph is approximately 250 words in length.
[KNOWLEDGE]
Forms and Genres
- L1: Demonstrates limited understanding of persuasive writing forms and genres.
- L2: Demonstrates some understanding of persuasive writing forms and genres.
- L3: Demonstrates considerable understanding of persuasive writing forms and genres.
- L4: Demonstrates thorough understanding of persuasive writing forms and genres.
[THINKING]
Planning Skills
- L1: Uses planning skills with limited effectiveness.
- L2: Uses planning skills with some effectiveness.
- L3: Uses planning skills with considerable effectiveness.
- L4: Uses planning skills with thorough effectiveness.
Critical and Creative Thinking
- L1: Uses critical and creative thinking skills with limited effectiveness.
- L2: Uses critical and creative thinking skills with some effectiveness.
- L3: Uses critical and creative thinking skills with considerable effectiveness.
- L4: Uses critical and creative thinking skills with thorough effectiveness.
[COMMUNICATION]
Expression of Ideas
- L1: Expresses ideas with limited clarity and persuasiveness.
- L2: Expresses ideas with some clarity and persuasiveness.
- L3: Expresses ideas with considerable clarity and persuasiveness.
- L4: Expresses ideas with thorough clarity and persuasiveness.
Text Organization
- L1: Organizes text with limited coherence and logic.
- L2: Organizes text with some coherence and logic.
- L3: Organizes text with considerable coherence and logic.
- L4: Organizes text with thorough coherence and logic.
[APPLICATION]
Language Conventions
- L1: Applies language conventions with limited accuracy.
- L2: Applies language conventions with some accuracy.
- L3: Applies language conventions with considerable accuracy.
- L4: Applies language conventions with thorough accuracy.
Vocabulary
- L1: Uses vocabulary with limited precision and variety.
- L2: Uses vocabulary with some precision and variety.
- L3: Uses vocabulary with considerable precision and variety.
- L4: Uses vocabulary with thorough precision and variety.
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Submissions
Kyleigh
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Xander
145 words
I would rather live in a house surrounded by snow than a house surrounded by a desert. In the desert, there is very limited water, but if my house is surrounded by snow, I could turn the snow into wat...
Max
0 words
Quinn
109 words
I would live in a house surrounded by the dessert and here are my reasons why for onw you would never be cold and wouldn't have to deal with the cold and have to where winter coats,parkas,snow pants,l...
Georgia
253 words
If I could pick to live in a desert or live in an area with a lot of snow I would go with the snow. there many things can go wrong when you're in a desert you can get overheated, you can start halluc...
What to work on: There are some run-on sentences in your writing. For example, 'Because many things can go wrong when you're in a desert you can get over heated...' needs a period or other punctuation to separate the ideas. Try breaking it down into smaller sentences. Also, watch out for repeating the word 'overheat.' Make sure to use proper punctuation, like commas, and fix small spelling mistakes like 'over heated' should be 'overheated.'
The Goal: For your next edit, focus on breaking down long sentences into smaller, clearer ones. Also, check for spelling and punctuation to help your writing flow better.
--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 3
Thinking: Level 3
Communication: Level 2.5
Application: Level 2
isaac
226 words
if I had to choose between a house surrounded by snow or a house surrounded by the dessert, I would choose a house surrounded by snow and let me tell you why, first reason, now you might think "why wo...
Jackson
57 words
I would rather live in a house surrounded by a desert and here is why. Before I tell why I would live in a desert, I am going to write this paragraph assuming I am living in a town, not just a house i...
Eva
237 words
If I had to choose between being surrounded by snow or surrounded by desert I would pick surrounded by snow. I would pick to be surrounded by snow because in winter we often get lots of snow. To live ...
What to work on: Watch out for run-on sentences. Some of your sentences are too long and need more punctuation to make them easier to read. For example, you can use periods or commas to break them up. Also, be careful with your spelling, capitals, and punctuation. Make sure every sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a period.
The Goal: Next time, focus on making your sentences clear by using the right punctuation. This will help your reader understand your ideas better.
--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 3
Thinking: Level 3
Communication: Level 3
Application: Level 2.5
