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Ready Player 2

Write the first chapter of 'Ready Player 2' by considering how 'Ready Player One' concluded. Reflect on unresolved plot points and potential future developments. Your chapter should be approximately 500 words.

[KNOWLEDGE]
Subject Matter
- L1: Demonstrates limited understanding of the themes and plot of 'Ready Player One'.
- L2: Demonstrates some understanding of the themes and plot of 'Ready Player One'.
- L3: Demonstrates considerable understanding of the themes and plot of 'Ready Player One'.
- L4: Demonstrates thorough understanding of the themes and plot of 'Ready Player One'.

[THINKING]
Planning Skills
- L1: Shows limited ability to plan and organize ideas for the chapter.
- L2: Shows some ability to plan and organize ideas for the chapter.
- L3: Shows considerable ability to plan and organize ideas for the chapter.
- L4: Shows thorough ability to plan and organize ideas for the chapter.

[COMMUNICATION]
Text Organization
- L1: Organizes ideas and information with limited effectiveness.
- L2: Organizes ideas and information with some effectiveness.
- L3: Organizes ideas and information with considerable effectiveness.
- L4: Organizes ideas and information with thorough effectiveness.

[APPLICATION]
Language Conventions
- L1: Uses language conventions with limited accuracy.
- L2: Uses language conventions with some accuracy.
- L3: Uses language conventions with considerable accuracy.
- L4: Uses language conventions with thorough accuracy.

Vocabulary
- L1: Uses vocabulary with limited effectiveness.
- L2: Uses vocabulary with some effectiveness.
- L3: Uses vocabulary with considerable effectiveness.
- L4: Uses vocabulary with thorough effectiveness.

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Submissions

Seth

388 words

after wade wins the compitition and sends Nolan serento to court for trail of murder and kidnapping head of ioi the main person everyone is wondering about is Mr wade watts who just made every news p...

You did a great job creating an exciting story with lots of action and drama. It's clear you have a lot of creative ideas! One thing to work on is making sure your sentences are clear and not too long. Right now, some of your sentences run together without enough punctuation, which makes it hard to understand what's happening. Try to use more periods to separate your ideas. For example, instead of writing everything in one long sentence, break it into shorter ones. Also, watch out for spelling mistakes like 'compitition' (should be 'competition') and 'billonaire' (should be 'billionaire'). For your next edit, focus on using periods to separate different ideas and double-check your spelling. This will make your story easier to read and understand.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 2.5
Thinking: Level 2.5
Communication: Level 2
Application: Level 2

Wilson, Addalyn

0 words

No feedback provided.

Blake

211 words

Wade finds himself at the end of the game with the third gate wide open. He enters and now has to be at halidays high score in tempest with Shoteo, Art3mis and Aech yapping at him telling him what to ...

What you did well: You have a creative story with interesting characters and events. Your ideas are exciting and show a lot of imagination.

What to work on: Watch out for run-on sentences. For example, when you say 'He eventually beat it and then has to be a character from the holy grail and the Monty Python and recite the lines perfectly witch he did successfully with the help of his friends and won the prize,' it's a bit too long without punctuation to separate the ideas. Try breaking it up with periods or commas to make it easier to read. Also, check your spelling for words like 'witch,' which should be 'which,' and 'acount,' which should be 'account.' Make sure to use capitals for proper nouns, like 'Haliday' should be 'Halliday,' and 'Aech' should be the same throughout.

The Goal: For your next edit, focus on breaking up long sentences and double-checking your spelling and capitals. This will make your writing clearer and more professional.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 2.5
Thinking: Level 2
Communication: Level 2.5
Application: Level 2

Owen

20 words

I think that wade watts is going to buy a big home and cool cars for him and his friends.

No feedback provided.

Levi

441 words

Ready player one concluded by wade winning the last key and winning the oasis challenge.(This takes place a year after)The first chapter starts with wade logging back into the oasis with him as we a...

What you did well: You've got a cool storyline going on and you used some exciting moments to keep the reader interested, like when Wade gets ambushed by fans.

What to work on: There are a few run-on sentences that need fixing. For example, "Wade loads in to a private chat with Artemis and H 'mister fancy came back for us' H says jokingly..." should have a period or comma to separate the thoughts. Also, make sure to check your spelling and punctuation, like 'yea' which should be 'yeah' and watch out for apostrophes, like in 'Wade's phone'.

The Goal: For your next edit, work on breaking up long sentences and double-check your spelling, capitals, and punctuation to make sure everything is clear and easy to read.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 2.5
Thinking: Level 2.5
Communication: Level 2.5
Application: Level 2

Kolton

612 words

Its finally over everything, Sorento is in jail, I own the whole Oasis, I can teleport wherever I want when ever and I just have to think where I want to go and I will be teleported there, I have as m...

What you did well: Your story has a lot of action and excitement, which makes it interesting to read! You have a good imagination.

What to work on: You have a lot of run-on sentences. This means you are trying to fit too many ideas into one sentence without using enough punctuation. For example, when you said, 'Its finally over everything, Sorento is in jail, I own the whole Oasis,' these are separate ideas and need more punctuation like periods or commas. Also, make sure to check your spelling. Words like 'fot' should be 'for' and 'headqaurters' should be 'headquarters.'

The Goal: For your next edit, try to use full stops (periods) to separate your ideas into clearer sentences. Also, double-check your spelling and make sure you are using 'it's' with an apostrophe when you mean 'it is'.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 3
Thinking: Level 3
Communication: Level 2.5
Application: Level 2

Ariel

0 words

No feedback provided.

Clara

603 words

“I grant Mr. Sorrento fifteen years in prison for the murder of Toshiro Yoshiaki,” the judge declared.“Fifteen years is all he gets?” Art3mis exclaimed. “He should get at least forty!” “Yeah!” Aech sh...

What you did well: Your story is full of excitement and keeps the reader interested. The action scenes are very vivid, which makes it easy to imagine what's happening.

What to work on: Be careful with run-on sentences. For example, when you write long sentences with a lot of commas, it can be confusing. Try breaking them into shorter sentences. Also, make sure to use quotation marks correctly when characters speak.

The Goal: For your next edit, focus on breaking up long sentences and double-checking your use of quotation marks. This will make your writing clearer and easier to follow.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 3.5
Thinking: Level 3.5
Communication: Level 4
Application: Level 3

McInroy-Dafoe, TJ

0 words

No feedback provided.

Kayden

108 words

in rp2 I think it is going to start with a recap in the last chapter for like what happens I after that we learn that what wade watts does with the money he fix the little things and he buys a mansio...

What you did well: You have a good idea of what you want to say, and you've included interesting details about the story.

What to work on: There are some run-on sentences here. For example, 'in rp2 I think it is going to start with a recap in the last chapter for like what happens' is a long sentence that needs a period or a comma to break it up. Try using periods to separate your ideas. Also, watch out for repeated words like 'and and' and check for spelling mistakes like 'th' instead of 'the'.

The Goal: For your next edit, focus on breaking long sentences into shorter ones and double-check your spelling and punctuation.


--- Assessment Summary ---
Knowledge: Level 2
Thinking: Level 2.5
Communication: Level 2
Application: Level 2

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after wade wins the compitition and sends Nolan serento to court for trail of murder and kidnapping head of ioi the main person everyone is wondering about is Mr wade watts who just made every news paper and has made him self a billonaire and where is he now meanwhile wade has just met up with Samantha cook aka artimis now wade has agreed to spilt the money with his new clan the high five made out of artimis shoto h and they are try to keep Nolan in jail for murder of dieto and the kidnapping of millions of people they are donating 100 millon dollars so that people who were taken by ioi so can find a home and as for the oasis wade and his clan made the oasis shut down on Thursdays and Mondays so people can go outside and do something with there lives now wade holds tournments in the oasis and the winner gets 50k so that they can have a heather live with the extra money theys tournys happen once a week and you can win if you have the skill today we go to court to see if nolan serrento is going to jail all rise for the judge says someone and we stand than the judge says Mr serrento you have been convected of murder and kidnapping Mr watts you are challenging to keep Mr serrento behind bars for the rest of his life your onner says serrento I would never do such a thing that's stupid says wade he is gultiy I have been in the ioi and they took me from my home and made me work like a slave to help them win the hunt says wade but sir says Nolan he stole are personal files and that is illegal but says wade he had files on the top five me artimes h and shoto and he tryed to kill me but I was not there so he killed my anaut and her stupid boyfriend and they take people do you have proof Mr wade the judge said yes said wade I would like to show you these files they have every thing on the high five oh wow says the judge this is just wow Mr serrento you are guilty yes says wade

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after wade wins the compitition and sends Nolan serento to court for trail of murder and kidnapping head of ioi the main person everyone is wondering about is Mr wade watts who just made every news paper and has made him self a billonaire and where is he now meanwhile wade has just met up with Samantha cook aka artimis now wade has agreed to spilt the money with his new clan the high five made out of artimis shoto h and they are try to keep Nolan in jail for murder of dieto and the kidnapping of millions of people they are donating 100 millon dollars so that people who were taken by ioi so can find a home and as for the oasis wade and his clan made the oasis shut down on Thursdays and Mondays so people can go outside and do something with there lives now wade holds tournments in the oasis and the winner gets 50k so that they can have a heather live with the extra money theys tournys happen once a week and you can win if you have the skill today we go to court to see if nolan serrento is going to jail all rise for the judge says someone and we stand than the judge says Mr serrento you have been convected of murder and kidnapping Mr watts you are challenging to keep Mr serrento behind bars for the rest of his life your onner says serrento I would never do such a thing that's stupid says wade he is gultiy I have been in the ioi and they took me from my home and made me work like a slave to help them win the hunt says wade but sir says Nolan he stole are personal files and that is illegal but says wade he had files on the top five me artimes h and shoto and he tryed to kill me but I was not there so he killed my anaut and her stupid boyfriend and they take people do you have proof Mr wade the judge said yes said wade I would like to show you these files they have every thing on the high five oh wow says the judge this is just wow Mr serrento you are guilty yes says wade

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after wade wins the compitition and sends Nolan serento to court for trail of murder and kidnapping head of ioi the main person everyone is wondering about is Mr wade watts who just made every news paper and has made him self a billonaire and where is he now meanwhile wade has just met up with Samantha cook aka artimis now wade has agreed to spilt the money with his new clan the high five made out of artimis shoto h and they are try to keep Nolan in jail for murder of dieto and the kidnapping of millions of people they are donating 100 millon dollars so that people who were taken by ioi so can find a home and as for the oasis wade and his clan made the oasis shut down on Thursdays and Mondays so people can go outside and do something with there lives now wade holds tournments in the oasis and the winner gets 50k so that they can have a heather live with the extra money theys tournys happen once a week and you can win if you have the skill today we go to court to see if nolan serrento is going to jail all rise for the judge says someone and we stand than the judge says Mr serrento you have been convected of murder and kidnapping Mr watts you are challenging to keep Mr serrento behind bars for the rest of his life your onner says serrento I would never do such a thing that's stupid says wade he is gultiy I have been in the ioi and they took me from my home and made me work like a slave to help them win the hunt says wade but sir says Nolan he stole are personal files and that is illegal but says wade he had files on the top five me artimes h and shoto and he tryed to kill me but I was not there so he killed my anaut and her stupid boyfriend and they take people do you have proof Mr wade the judge said yes said wade I would like to show you these files they have every thing on the high five oh wow says the judge this is just wow Mr serrento you are guilty yes says wade
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